(based on suggestions from peeps at Paul's birthday party, but I can't remember from who! Mystery contributors today.)
**Update! Aimee has reminded me that she was the one who suggested dog food. A discussion of why there were peas in dog food followed.
i.
I fell from a tree!
**Update! Aimee has reminded me that she was the one who suggested dog food. A discussion of why there were peas in dog food followed.
i.
I fell from a tree!
Our thoughts produce xanthophylls
Leaves land in dog food
ii.
A wet gumboot march
Rubber stomp of size six dreams -
Bought before your birth
iii.
iii.
Spoon breaks the suction
Plop! It falls into the bowl
Autumn-toned dog food
iv.
iv.
I would remember
Wet leaf dreams and dog food spoons -
If I'd had less wine
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Today's poems are haiku, 3 line poems with 5, 7, and 5 syllables respectively. They traditionally contain a a kigo or seasonal reference (autumn, in this case) and a kireji or cutting word - this has no equivalent in English, so English haiku often use punctuation (eg. a dash, ellipsis or exclamation mark) to cut the stream of the poem or make the reader reflect on the juxtaposition of images/thoughts.
Haiku are a bit like picture books - people think because they're short they are easy to write, but it's because they are short that they are hard. It's easy to write crap haiku. I wrote heaps this morning and these are actually the best ones (no, really. You shoulda seen the ones I chucked out).
I'm also long-winded, so restricting an idea to 17 syllables without being too mundane or simply telling a joke is difficult. It's a bit like cramming a thought into a tweet, and you get 140 characters for that.
These haiku are based on suggestions made at Paul's party (dog food and dreams), which I had to ask about again because I couldn't remember what was suggested, and I still can't remember who suggested what. Sigh.
Xanthophyll provides the yellow colouring in autumn leaves.
2 comments:
That is the most insightful and concise and understandable explanation of haiku I've read! Thank you so much!
And your haiku are lovely!
Happy Birthday to Paul, btw.
Ha! Excellent. I should run classes.
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